In class today we read another student’s paper and critiqued it for them. Ashley only had a few minutes to read my paper, and we only made it to page two, but she noticed that I used a lot of quotes. I grafted quotes into my paper, so my personal words were still the bulk of my paper, however, Ashley noted that I said Zabriskie’s word “cherish” five times in a matter of about three sentences. Her suggestion was to eliminate three or so of the “cherished” bits of my paper.
Besides my excessive quotes, Ashley maintained that I did a nice job of holding on to my voice throughout my first two pages. 🙂